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walls keep closing in on me
once opened doors shut tight
darkened skies refuse to clear

what's the point anymore?
why continue this mundane existence?

but then I think of you
you make me want to live
you make me want to breathe
you make me hope again
you listen to me...


friends I loved have disappeared
fresh enemies abound
dark shadows follow me home

what have I to live for?
why go on to face a dismal future?

but then I think of you
you make me want to live
you make me want to breathe
you make me hope again
you listen to me...


world spinning out of control
madness all around me
can't control these emotions

what do I have to offer?
why pretend that I matter to this world?

but then I think of you
you make me want to live
you make me want to breathe
you make me hope again
you listen to me...

pain and sorrow/never-ending
live tomorrow/answer pending
desperate feelings/wanting closure
needing healing/not exposure
will you take me/will you save me
can I break free/can I brave be

or should I just give up...


can't control the world outside
can control what's in me
endless possibilities

what gain is there in losing?
why should I give in when I have your love?

it's all because of you...

you make me want to live
you make me want to breathe
you make me hope again
you listen to me
you listen to me

I want to live

yes, I want to live
hope amid sorrow
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Little-Tin-Wings Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2014
Beautifully written and put together.  I loved it :heart:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
so happy!
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Wonderpland Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014
Beautiful... <3
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
ooh - thanks
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
heartfelt, i like it :) great title  
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks mugs
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
(sigh)  if only I could compose music.  gotta leave that to someone else
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Anninhaxox Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
Well, it's lovely lyrics nonetheless. :) 
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sixdegreesofrhiannon Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
Verse 1:
walls keep closing in on me
once opened doors shut tight
darkened skies refuse to clear

what's the point anymore?
why continue this mundane existence?

Chorus:
but then I think of you
you make me want to live
you make me want to breathe
you make me hope again
you listen to me...


Verse 2:
world spinning out of control
madness all around me
can't control these emotions

what do I have to offer?
why pretend that I matter to this world?
[Repeat chorus]

Verse 3:
world spinning out of control
madness all around me
can't control these emotions

what do I have to offer?
why pretend that I matter to this world?
[Repeat chorus]

Bridge:
pain and sorrow/neverending
live tomorrow/answer pending
desperate feelings/wanting closure
needing healing/not exposure
will you take me/will you save me
can I break free/can I brave be

or should I just give up...


can't control the world outside
can control what's in me
endless possibilities

what gain is there in losing?
why should I give in when I have your love? 

it's all because of you...
[Repeat chorus]

Coda:
I want to live 

yes, I want to live


Hehe, I just thought that the format is somehow like a song's. Panda Bunny Neko Misc Emoji-07 (Applause) [V1] 

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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It is a song and was submitted as such.  Thanks for formatting (missed verse 4 though).  What I really need now is a melody.  Any ideas?
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sixdegreesofrhiannon Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
You're welcome. And yes, I thought about the melody, and I was able to come up with something nice (I guess); the problem is that I really don't know how to make sheet music. Neko Emoji-11 (I luv apples) [V1] 
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
And I don't know one note from another. I guess we're hopeless
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Delice1941 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
:iconrosablu:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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virnagray Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful words:)
There is always someone in our lives that we 
want to live for...

Being this a physical or spiritual person.
Well said♡♥♡
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, I left it open to interpretation. Thanks for reading
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virnagray Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Always! ♡♥♡
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Loyalty1998 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful.
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for kind words
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Joe-Maccer Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
Very good words. :clap:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks joe
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Joe-Maccer Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
My pleasure, Tommy.
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