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He noticed that her hair was as blonde as the sun,
perfectly brushed, hanging loosely about her shoulders.

He noticed that her lips were as red as crimson,
curled slightly up, in an everlasting smile.

He noticed that her wedding ring glistened in the light,
a band of gold, a reminder of good times past.

He noticed that her eyes were closed as if asleep,
those beautiful blues, the windows to her soul.


But what he noticed most of all was a heart no longer beating,
a chest no longer rising and falling with breath.

"This deafening silence; O to hear her laugh once again!"


As she lay there now in her eternal bedchamber,
her lifeless body as still as the hands of a broken timepiece,
he couldn't help notice, no, he couldn't help but notice...

That his life would never be the same.
somtimes it's just soooo hard...

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WhitePlumFragrance Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Nice anaphora here, this is quite a sad text, still great though. :)
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks lena
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halcyonshores Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Deeply moving. Thank you for sharing. :iconwhiteroseplz:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner May 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yes...how often and how many
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7LULU7 Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This legit made me cry, if it made me cry that means it's a beautiful piece :love:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks again for your kind comments. my next one will be happy, i promise! :)
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7LULU7 Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:D okay that's good a little positive work won't hurt
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tickersymbol Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your words cause one to ache with him...beautifully and powerfully written. :heart:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks tick
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tickersymbol Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure.....p.s. I like my nickname. I have had very few in my lifetime, and I find them quite endearing. :)
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
lol well... I don't know your real one
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tickersymbol Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Diane :)
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
awww... nice
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tickersymbol Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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Delice1941 Featured By Owner May 5, 2013
Ooooooo sadness from every line:rose:
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
drip drip
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Delice1941 Featured By Owner May 6, 2013
:rose:
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xZ0MBiiEx Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is heart-wrenching, and I appreciate that a lot. Well done.
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much
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xZ0MBiiEx Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!
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Medoriko Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Student Writer
This is a very strong and emotional piece. I like the transition from beginning to end. It starts out fine, and you understand how he feels for her. Then it switches to a darker tone, death and you're left feeling a bit crushed and feeling for him. It's something a lot of people can relate to. Your word choice was also spot on. Well done.
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tommyboywood Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much. Yes it seems tougher on a man when his princess goes first
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Medoriko Featured By Owner May 4, 2013  Student Writer
It does indeed. You portray the emotion well. And anytime :)
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